Loyaulte Me Lie ([info]shocolate) wrote in [info]hprwfqf,
2005-02-13 10:16:00
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I Dare You

Title: I Dare You
Author: [info]shocolate
Pairing: Harry/Ron
Rating: R

Written for the [info]hprwfqf.

My Challenge :- 77 They kiss on a dare, and realise they want to keep kissing.

Betaed by the perfection that is [info]magicofisis.

I Dare You
Tags: 2005, r, shocolate

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[info]ihlanya

February 13 2005, 12:15:16 UTC 7 years ago

Holy shit.

*tries to draw breath and fails miserably*

*chokes*

The dialogue between all the boys was excellent. Very well done, bringing all of their characteristics to the fore. I loved Ron's "I don't have a problem!"

And the kiss itself was just ... phew ... I may have to go and get a cold shower. *nods* Yes. A cold shower.

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 19:25:32 UTC 7 years ago

Many thanks.

Yes, I really loved "I don't have a problem!" - bless him!

[info]ceilidh

February 13 2005, 13:28:23 UTC 7 years ago

Aww! Precious, clueless, adorable boys. <3

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 19:26:18 UTC 7 years ago

Aren't they just adorable together?

Oh, can't we have just a tiny bit of Harry/Ron in canon?

*hugs your icon*

[info]aome

February 13 2005, 14:58:09 UTC 7 years ago

Ron leant backwards and Harry reached for him and grabbed a handful of the faded orange Cannons t-shirt to hold him in place.

I could picture this SO well. You did a great job with the challenge. I especially loved the scene with Ron in the bathroom. Nice teenage-boy mind-view there. :D And hot kissing!

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 19:27:05 UTC 7 years ago

Poor Ron - clueless!Ron is one of my favourite things in the world!

Many thanks!

[info]kaalee

February 13 2005, 15:18:13 UTC 7 years ago

omg KISSING!! *sigh*

Yes. so adorable, honey.

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 19:27:40 UTC 7 years ago

*curtseys*

*so you can look down my cleavage*

I adore clueless!Ron.

And you.

[info]mad_martha

February 13 2005, 15:33:22 UTC 7 years ago

“I don’t have a problem,” said Ron.

LOL! Lovely. The dialogue is fantastic (you know what a tart I am for dialogue) and I loved the whole drunken dare and what followed. Poor Ron. Lucky Ron ....

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 19:28:21 UTC 7 years ago

*twirls you*

I get easily confused wriritng dialogue for five, so this pleases me muchly!

[info]donnaimmaculata

February 13 2005, 15:55:32 UTC 7 years ago

Aw, they're adorable. Sweet, clueless Ron (even though personally I rather fancy his eldest brother). I loved the "I don't have a problem" line and how he was too embarrassed to wank fantasising about Hermione. And the kiss? Hot.

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 19:28:53 UTC 7 years ago

Isn't he perfect?

You can have Bill - Ron rocks my world!

[info]lizardlaugh

February 13 2005, 18:01:29 UTC 7 years ago

It's absolutely wonderful, hehe. I love the boys. So funny and awkward and silly.

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 19:29:30 UTC 7 years ago

Funny and awkward is excellent.

Many thanks.

*adores your icon*

[info]magicofisis

February 13 2005, 19:16:08 UTC 7 years ago

I just adore this story! They are so clueless and cute - very canonlike. Fantastic job!

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 19:30:24 UTC 7 years ago

Telling me I have a canonlike Ron is the quickest way of seducing me, you know that, don't you?

[info]natural_bore

February 13 2005, 19:52:27 UTC 7 years ago

“Cheers, mate,” said Harry. “Really encouraging. Who exactly am I supposed to practise on?”
“Lavender,” suggested Neville.
“Hey!” interrupted Seamus. “Don’t offer my girlfriend to him.”
“To be fair,” said Dean, “she’d probably do it.”

A big snork to this.

And a hug for making Ron cuter than ever.

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 19:58:58 UTC 7 years ago

Oh Ron is just the cutest thing on the planet.

I don't know how this happened to me.

In-denial!Ron is just scrummy!

Many thnaks.

[info]annearchy

February 13 2005, 20:13:35 UTC 7 years ago

Very cute and adorable and IC for both of them :) Just barely manages not to go into R territory but I think you pulled off the hard (ahem) PG-13 rating.

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 20:24:44 UTC 7 years ago

Saying they were IC makes me impossibly twirly!

I have no idea about US ratings - here we have 12A, 15 and 18 - you don't have anything for 15, which I think you should - if only so Dan can see them!

[info]snitchnip_chill

February 13 2005, 20:47:41 UTC 7 years ago

Mmm, they're so darned cute. :)

And Luna annexing Neville, I can totally see that being exactly what happened.

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 20:52:57 UTC 7 years ago

I spent AGES chosing a word, and annexing seemed just right - even if JKR has said it won't happen!!

Can I please have a Ron? I just love him sooo much!

152 days - I am getting scared - if she hurts my Ron - without Harry kissing it better - I will cry!

[info]aux

February 13 2005, 22:17:53 UTC 7 years ago

Aww RON <3<3
They're just so funny together and their canon boy-ness makes me go giggly :)

“Harry,” said Neville.
“What?” asked Harry.
“No, Harry,” insisted Neville.
“No, me, what?” demanded Harry.
*clutches sides* *ggg*

[info]shocolate

February 13 2005, 22:23:12 UTC 7 years ago

Saying my boys are canon means the world to me!

[info]azurelunatic

February 13 2005, 23:18:11 UTC 7 years ago

Teenage boy awkwardness. So hot.

[info]shocolate

February 14 2005, 09:01:22 UTC 7 years ago

*curtseys*

[info]undula

February 14 2005, 02:28:35 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, this was just what I needed, so funny and cute and hot - it made me very happy :D The dialogue was brilliant and omg the kissing *melts*

And I love your Ron. And Harry too, but particularly Ron. i could totally picture his different voice tones and expressions and everything, you write him so canonly.
Ron's just so <3 !

Lovely fic!

[info]shocolate

February 14 2005, 09:02:21 UTC 7 years ago

*sobs and clings to you*

Saying my Ron is canon is the greatest compliment in the world. There is no better way of seducing me!

[info]ravenpan

February 14 2005, 18:03:54 UTC 7 years ago

Gorgeous. Yet again, you manage to make me like Harry/Ron *chuckle* I don't know how you do it! But that was beautiful.

[info]shocolate

February 14 2005, 18:07:28 UTC 7 years ago

*is proud*

That means the world to me, as you don't usually ship them!

[info]ms_beeblebrox

February 15 2005, 00:51:19 UTC 7 years ago

“I don’t have a problem,” insisted Ron.

best line ever. ever. Aside from the bit about wanking to Hermione. Because she would know. She knows everything. I like this story for it's cute flustering teenage boys. It seems so canon. :)

[info]soberloki

February 15 2005, 01:35:43 UTC 7 years ago

Hermione would SO know he'd been wanking with her in mind. Seriously.

Ron is ADORABLE. So's Harry, really, but Ron especially, and I loved this bit of ENTIRELY POSSIBLE canon-ish dialogue, it made me laugh out loud:

Harry looked shifty. “Everyone knows I kissed Cho,” he said.
“Everyone knows that Cho kissed you – and that that was two years ago,” Seamus pointed out.
“Yeah, well, I’ve been busy since then,” muttered Harry.
“But you must be way out of practise by now,” offered Neville.
“Cheers, mate,” said Harry. “Really encouraging. Who exactly am I supposed to practise on?”
“Lavender,” suggested Neville.
“Hey!” interrupted Seamus. “Don’t offer my girlfriend to him.”
“To be fair,” said Dean, “she’d probably do it.”

[info]shocolate

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[info]cmere

February 15 2005, 01:39:13 UTC 7 years ago

Oh, this was just beyond precious. Beside the adorable nervous school boys having crushes on each other business, UST just gets to me like no other, and I love the way you characterized the boys. They seemed like such teenagers, it was perfect, and hot :D Great job!

[info]shocolate

February 15 2005, 07:37:27 UTC 7 years ago

oh gosh!

*curtseys*

It is all about teh harry/ron!

[info]crikkita

February 16 2005, 02:32:06 UTC 7 years ago

You know, I've been on LJ so little lately, I wouldn't even have seen this if someone hadn't reviewed my story and mentioned [info]quickquotes. Didja know we got recced together? Awww.

Anyway, WOW. You are, as always, impossibly brilliant. This fic is incredibly hot, and incredibly, well, Harry/Ron. I won't argue with your assertion that [info]magicofisis is perfection, because we all know she is, but darling, you are perfection itself!

Lovely. And hot. And lovely. And I'm running out of things to say, even though there was never anything I could have said that would have been sufficient. I think I'll just drool some more. *drools*

[info]crikkita

February 16 2005, 02:32:45 UTC 7 years ago

Oops, I meant [info]quickquote. Right.

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[info]ellieet

February 18 2005, 18:17:33 UTC 7 years ago

*Gasps* Must...have...more...before...I...convulse...so...GOOD...

*Adds to memories*

[info]shocolate

February 18 2005, 18:23:26 UTC 7 years ago

*blushes*

It is all about teh Harry/ron!

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[info]rosina_alcona

February 22 2005, 15:34:59 UTC 7 years ago

There are no words. Apart from there are.

First of all: the Gryffindor boys! up after lights out! drinking and being naughty! this is so how I want them to be. And lounging in boxers and t-shirts...fgjkfhgsf!

“To be fair,” said Dean, “she’d probably do it.” - hahahaha!! She so would. I am more like Lavender than I care to admit...

Neville is just wonderful. Of course his solution makes perfect sense, and the boys immediately realise this. Although Ron's 'I don't have a problem' is classic!

The kiss. GUH. The way that everything else fades out around them, and they are so ACUTELY aware of every detail of eachother and the straight-to-the-groin is so true and....*wibbles*

the dialogue between the two of them is so very perfect. My boys! My boys!!! 'You're not taking the piss are you Harry?' Does it get more canon? I think not.

[info]shocolate

February 22 2005, 17:52:11 UTC 7 years ago

Marry me.

Seriously.

That solves both our problems - "I don't have a problem," said Rosina - my craptastic spouse, who never says anything nice to me, and your insane mother, who wants you to get married.

We can write Harry/Ron together and live happily ever after!

[info]rosina_alcona

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[info]mark356

March 13 2005, 09:36:08 UTC 7 years ago

This was fabulous! You have described the kiss in beautiful detail, both physical and emotional.

[info]wigglynoodle

April 1 2005, 02:56:00 UTC 7 years ago

The dialogue was great!

[info]secondsilk

May 11 2005, 07:30:55 UTC 7 years ago

Oh!
One more step on the road to Harry/Ron 'shippiness. Sigh.
I thought the end of the Dare scene was awkward. This is probably because there were five seventeen year old boys in the room, and however blase they had been acting, two of them had just kissed. Guh!
I am so glad that Ron and Harry managed to talk about it reasonably well (for seventeen year old boys).
So very nicely done. Very good take on the genre.

[info]freakyartychick

July 20 2005, 04:54:22 UTC 6 years ago

sigh.. so cute!

[info]screamerdreamer

September 4 2005, 02:22:42 UTC 6 years ago

*looks around* What, am I late or something? :X

That kiss was hotter than some sex scenes I've read.

“I’m sorry, Harry,” said Ron, finally turning back to look at him. “I turned it into a real kiss, I’m sorry.”

“Me too,” said Harry.

“You’re sorry?” said Ron.

“No! I wanted to do it too,” said Harry desperately.

Ron’s eyes opened very wide and he swallowed the lump in his very dry throat to try and speak. “Too?” he managed.

Long quote, but it was just too adorable to picture them being all awkward in conversation like so. I loved it. And yay for drunkenIrishandinstigating!Seamus :D

[info]shocolate

September 4 2005, 09:35:19 UTC 6 years ago

You are just a ridiculously thorough reader!

I love the five of them getting drunk together. Bless.

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6 years ago

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